For my final pieces I made several changes from my first drafts
Front Cover:
- I changed the image on the front and then also in turn the name and information of the cover star to fit with her real name
- I switched the tag line and website around so that the tag line was closer to the title as I thought this would be more appropriate
- I also changed the colour of the competition circle to black and made it bigger and more circular as I feel this makes it much more eye-catching to the potential reader and correcting the shape in particular much more professional looking
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| Final draft front cover |
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| Final Piece front cover |
Contents Page:
I changed the page numbers to allow room for adverts within the magazine
I also changed the colour of the page numbers to make them stand out more and catch the readers eye
Again, name changes referring to the cover star were made
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| First draft contents page |
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| Final draft contents page |
Double Page Spread:
Pictures were replaced with the final pictures
Name changes occurred here also
Questions and a quote were changed to be red. The questions were changed because I felt that they sunk into the background and were not very eye catching to the reader and even risked the piece looking a bit dull. The quote was changed also to be eye catching too
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| First draft double page spread |
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Final piece double page spread
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Well done, Jade - there's lots to comment on here. I'd like to see other people in the group add their comments too!
ReplyDeleteFirst, I like the retro look to the magazine - it's like a later version of Sniffin' Glue or early copies of Sounds. It's very 'indie' and has a low-budget fanzine feel to it, which works.
Be careful in your evaluation to make sure you comment on the sources of your inspiration and say why you went for such a feel.
P1 - I'd have a play with the barcode. It's not usual for it to float in the middle of the page and I'm not sure it helps the feel of your mag.
The boost at the bottom of the page is also odd, but I think it works with the overall concept of a retro fanzine.
Also, look at the comments I put on Alice W's work - they are quite generic and apply to most people in the group re layout.
DPS - look at the amount of white space around the headline. I'm not opposed to creative white space, but this seems to be a little too much.
Also, the body text looks a little too clean and
modular for a roung indie-type mag. How can you make it look more dirty?
Also, on P1 - watch the size of the button. It's a big ball of black at the moment. Make sure it's not the focal point of the page.
Finally, think of the main focal point of the page. Sure, it's the image, but what is your spalsh? One headline needs to stand out (usually)
Well done - it's looking unique and the end is in sight :-)